Pg 11

posted 23rd Aug 2016, 8:45 AM

Pg 11
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23rd Aug 2016, 8:45 AM

R. Burnett

I totally love how cute Natalia is to Ember at the last there. =.= but we are waiting to see if she happens to have some kind of an angle~

Also... Gosh Ember has a lot of hair. I mean Natalia has and equivalent amount of hair but like I feel like Ember has a LOT of hair. I feel her pain on a deep person, but blond hair problem instead of red XD

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23rd Aug 2016, 5:24 PM

crowbar

So many great things about this page! The 'explosion' effect in p2, Ember & Natalia's expressions, etc. They make a great duo.

The second speech bubble in p1 is a little unclear, though. Maybe, "Whoever smuggled them through used old forgeries made by my brother to get them through the Night Market"?

Also, the speech bubble in p7 is missing a word; maybe should read, "Many of the victims were street fighters"? (The first time, I read it as "Many of my victims were street fighters", which makes Natalia sound like a vampire...)

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24th Aug 2016, 5:15 PM

R. Burnett

.................... lol this is what happens when I don't let Sam proof read the pages before I que them XD WHOOPS. Thanks for that.

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